Jorge Romero

Mar 18, 2022

Ann Handley, in the book "Everybody writes" introduces this concept of the "Ugly first draft". That I think matches closely what you propose here!

I will have to learn some of the data-analysis-based methods you use for getting insights on performance. As I currently don't do anything about that.

I really appreciate the insight of using data analysis. Thanks Miki Szeles

May I offer some feedback? I find it way easier to read shorter paragraphs, and I have seen that improvement in your writing! However there are three things that make it a little hard for me to read (because I have ADHD).

Having single-line paragraphs one after the other.
Using bold letters too often.
I can't follow who is talking in the conversation sections.

I think a good example of using bold letters effectively is when you retold the "mumbling on the street" story. As you only highlight the new changes, where you want the attention of the reader to go.

The single line paragraphs "blend" (I'm thinking that I may be slightly dyslexic) for me. So I get easily distracted before finishing the idea. The same for the conversations. Both long paragraphs and consecutive single-line paragraphs end up being very hard to read for me.

I can only say that those are issues for me. Again, I have ADHD and have a very hard time reading anything in the first place XD.

Finally, I am really loving your new approach to cover illustrations!

Thank you very much for your detailed feedback Jorge Romero. I appreciate it. 😊

I also read Ann Hadley's book. I am mentioning the "Ugly first draft" in one of my upcoming articles.

Ann's ugly first draft is quite different from this concept. She is only talking about writing and iterating inside one article, as far as I know.

The RWRR method is about iterating articles.

Thanks for sharing how you perceive my writing with ADHD. Up till now, I did not consider this factor.

Let me tell you how and why my writing is here at the moment.

In the beginning, I had very long paragraphs containing many thoughts. So I decided to highlight the critical information in it.

Thanks to the RWRR iterations during the weeks, this improved a lot.

I started to write shorter paragraphs containing only one thought.

Then I started to use Twitter, which highly affected my writing style as you have to condense the essence of your writing into 160 characters.

I used many filler words in the past, which I got rid of almost completely.

Now my writing is much denser, and as I use only a few filler words, the information density of my article becomes much higher.

I see two potential ways to further improve from here:

Neglecting one part of my message and only highlighting the other minor part.
Not highlighting anything at all.

I do not know which direction will I choose, but I may try both ways.

Regarding the conversation: Yeah, I am sure it is not easy to follow, especially as I am talking to myself, but I gave a clutch by using the - sign. Each new - character means the other me started to speak.

I also considered the option to add the names before each line, but in the end, I decided this solution would be adequate. But it looks like I was wrong, as at least it caused a headache to you. I am pretty curious what the others will say about it.

Thanks for taking the time not just to read it but also to give such a long and valuable feedback Jorge Romero. 😊👍

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